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Here's to new love.

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Created: 05/12 2007
Views: 690
Category: Love

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Mr. Newguy

It's all a dream . . .

Holding on to a memory of what used to mater to me,

The night gown you wore while we walked on the shore,

The touch of your hand and with our feet in the sand,

If only we could go back to that place and resorrect the smile on my face,

But it's all a dream cracking at the seam,

What used to matter now makes me mad as a hatter. 

We used to talk for hours and I used to bring you flowers,

I'd lay with you in front of the fire and our pulse sped higher and higher,

The feel of skin on skin now never to happen again,

but it's all a dream cracking at the seam,

What used to make my heart race now has lost all it's grace.

She fills my hours with beauty and we walk out by the sea,

She makes me smile and every night we talk for a while,

I fill her life with love and devotion as deep as any ocean,

I think of what she is to me and how happy we will be,

I disreguard our dream so another can beam,

I think of her face and it gives me back my grace. 

 

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On May 24th 2007 Jbelled24 Said: 
Jbelled24 So sweetiedrea24 must be your girl...interesting
On May 21st 2007 SweetieDrea24 Said: 
SweetieDrea24 Hey honey i really liked this one....idk just something about really stuck with me...keep it up ~i love you
On May 21st 2007 NeutralR1 Said: 
NeutralR1 I think its a great poem. Like i stated before i am not much for reading poetry, but your work is good.
On May 20th 2007 JenMoe Said: 
JenMoe The other part I forgot to add was that I am a little confused about it. Are you saying you are giving up the dream of one woman for the dream of another? Enlighten me, if you will.
On May 20th 2007 JenMoe Said: 
JenMoe Hmmmm...... ok, first off, sorry its taken so long for my feedback. Second off, I like it. Its really good. I had to get over the format of the writing, but its very good. Although my one piece of criticism would be, remember that rhymes aren't always necessary. Some of the lines feel a little forced in a few places. But *shrugs* good overall.
On May 14th 2007 lavonea Said: 
lavonea i liked it alot it was beautiful! made me smile
On May 13th 2007 charming8 Said: 
charming8 so sweet! =)
On May 13th 2007 California1516 Said: 
California1516 awwwwww i love this one..nice job!:)
On May 13th 2007 atothedogg Said: 
atothedogg I like it a lot. You have a very unique style of writing. bravo.... Ashley~
On May 13th 2007 phhs2010marie Said: 
phhs2010marie very sweet and I just love it =]
On May 12th 2007 dark013angel Said: 
dark013angel i love it..just...it's amazing....good job
On May 12th 2007 iXAllyOopsXi Said: 
iXAllyOopsXi awl i like this =] i wish i could write like u !
On May 12th 2007 tswieberg Said: 
tswieberg I love it!
On May 12th 2007 ausjo Said: 
ausjo Beautiful as always. Love your style. ;)
On May 12th 2007 hackerlord Said: 
hackerlord way to go
On May 12th 2007 Jbelled24 Said: 
Jbelled24 Wow!! Thats awesome! I have so many thoughts about it....hmmm