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my second poem... :DRate this Poem
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My Poems
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33
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Forest Song |
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21
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Night is my Metaphor |
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22
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Endless Thoughts |
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15
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Desert |
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17
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Why? |
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15
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Snow |
Night is my Metaphor
Beyond the horizon the sky grows dark
Like a sheet of darkness covering the world
With stars beginning to appear, leaving their mark
In several different patterns, as if they were swriled
The moon shines bright, radiant and proud
Showing itself off for miles on end
Over the infinite ocean with hardly a sound
Waiting only for its reflection to send
As clouds begin to seep, waves begin to roll
Thunder begins to clap while lightning starts to strike
The sea grows wild and raging, as if it were a tempered soul
The untamed water and terrifying sky were very much alike
Still, the moon and the stars shimmer through thick and thin
After time had passed, the storm begins to fade away
Unleashing spectacular beams of light as if there had never been
The kind of light that does not lead astray
| On February 7th 2009 erickagere Said: |
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| How pretty. And when I say pretty, I get this mental image of your poem. Loves it. |
| On December 30th 2008 animallover925 Said: |
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| awesomeness i love it!!! |
| On December 29th 2008 godsbluejay Said: |
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| i love night haha and this poem lol nice |
| On October 25th 2007 Meowspots Said: |
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| thank you guys! |
| On October 25th 2007 ShinseiOnnen Said: |
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| Awesomeness!!! Very good job. :) Love it!!! |
| On October 25th 2007 Thugnastay227 Said: |
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| if this is truly only ur second poem then this is pretty good. I'm not going to critique because i believe everyone should have their own unique style. i like it. good job. |
| On October 23rd 2007 Meowspots Said: |
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| thanks for the advice! :) |
| On October 23rd 2007 MrKeesee Said: |
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| Loved this poem, my only critique would be to avoid the forced rhyme, as seen in lines 5 and 7. |
| On October 23rd 2007 transgenic Said: |
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| Awesome word choice, this is beautiful! There's something about the title that I'm in love with, too! |
| On October 23rd 2007 Meowspots Said: |
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| thanks!! |
| On October 23rd 2007 nockets Said: |
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| i like it! it's mysterious and beautiful! |


