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i prefer sunrises to sunsets...

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Created: 06/21 2007
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Category: Respect

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~Rather Sunrises~

Oh, brightening scene,
  like a gregarious friend,
Your fierce gaze makes such
  powerful spatial overflows.
Telling me, though i hear
  no words or sounds,
That a brilliant play will soon begin;
  mysterious with bouts of subconcious structures.

Exhaustion from happiness;
  such lascivious happenings.
The sun continued to rise
  with such intense yawns.
If ever a time is the now;
  all time is for a while.
Ashes feed the ancient trees
  in unearthing requiems.
And i awaken from my slumber
  with eyes anew in fresh views.

Oh, brightening scene,
  like a gregarious friend,
Your fierce gaze makes such
  powerful spatial overflows.
Telling me, though i hear
  no words or sounds,
That a brilliant play will now begin;
  mysterious with bouts of subconcious structures.

The day is brand-new
  with obscure and efficacious events.
Winds ruffle abound with whisperings;
  found to laugh through vortexes.
Life is a living in cycles
  that last for all times.
The sun continued onward
  with it's progressing ritual.
And though i cover my eyes
  from this new lighting,
I am struck with gratification
  on being able to attend this ceremony.

Oh, brightening scene,
  like a gregarious friend,
Your fierce gaze makes such
  powerful spatial overflows.
Telling me, though i hear
  no words or sounds,
That a brilliant play has begun;
  mysterious with bouts of subconcious structures.

Original form of options;
  though vague in sightings.
Soft brushstrokes of coziness
  in subcutaneous touchings.
The sun continued to it's destined path,
  slowly now...
Distraught content of joy;
  sought out as pummels of smiles and giggles.
I am awake now
  with intentional infiltration to be human-living (?)

 

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On August 15th 2007 Myst222 Said: 
Myst222 wonderful and moving! like a breath of fresh morning air!
On August 12th 2007 mazerthumpkin Said: 
mazerthumpkin ouch...(I won't be too harsh. lol) you had good vocabulary, but be careful when trying for big words...the danger is finding words that won't sound poetic or flow with the movement. "The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between lightning and the lightning bug." -- Mark Twain
On June 23rd 2007 salamanteri Said: 
salamanteri nice, I like it a lot :)
On June 21st 2007 AlexINTJ Said: 
AlexINTJ Beautiful! I love the repetition--it gives the reader something to root to. Wonderful vocabulary--I did need a dictionary twice haha. I loved it--it flowed naturally and was easy to read however complex--though I think that I'll need to read it a couple trillion times to be able to grasp it. lol the imagery was stunning. I loved it--probably my favorite so far!
On June 21st 2007 California1516 Said: 
California1516 wow..nice!!! i liked it
On June 21st 2007 Qurmudjin Said: 
Qurmudjin Wow! You have a real knack for free verse. The repeating line "Oh, brightening scene, like a gregarious friend" is fantastic. The big words really work here and don't come off like someone reaching with a thesaurus. Great job!
On June 21st 2007 mickygrl22 Said: 
mickygrl22 I LIKE IT