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NOOOO I AM NOT EMO! It just came to me(:Rate this Poem
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Created:
07/20 2009
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108
Category:
Passion
My Poems
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12
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Just One Lonely Heart. |
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8
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Is it love? |
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8
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Despair At Its Best. |
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11
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Thy Sweet Addiction. |
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8
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To let it happen. |
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Let Their Sanity Waver. |
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6
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Lets play like little kids |
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17
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Diana |
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8
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NightTime(October 1st,2009) |
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Epidemic Murder. |
Thy Sweet Addiction.
Just let me cut it deep,
So deep that I will bleed to death,
Let my silver razor,
cut a little deeper.
Don't pull away my hand,
Please dont plead me to stop.
I need this addiction,
Just like all the others.
I need to feel power,
Over everything I ever was.
Don't let the look in my eyes betray you,
This is all I'll ever want.
Two slit wrists,
My blood puddled on the floor.
Don't let my eyes betray you,
The tears are fake not true.
Please don't stop me,
Its my addiction.
My lovely addiction,
Its all I have.
Don't take that away.
Just let me cut it deeper,
Just a little deeper.
Please,
Don't try to help me,
Your wasting your time.
You honestly truely are wasting your time.
Please Login to post comments| On August 7th 2009 servantofall36 Said: |
| Interesting study. |
| On July 23rd 2009 ethanK93 Said: |
| this reminds me of one of my friends, sadly...but that was a long time ago. |
| On July 22nd 2009 RockAngelGirl Said: |
| i like it =) |
| On July 21st 2009 Vexion15 Said: |
| So you're Poker Facing and bluffin' with your muffin'... |
| On July 20th 2009 XEMOtionalGrLX Said: |
| its good, but like he said you shouldve gone more into detail :] i like it though :D |
| On July 20th 2009 MauiWowies Said: |
| Ok, well C+C..you had some decent imagery in the beginning such as the "silver razor" and "feel power" but through the most it didnt go into sensory details? How does it feel when your slit is made, what do you see, here, do you scream or bite your lip? It also got very repetitions. You mentioned your eyes in the same way twice, you talked about the action of cutting a lot but never went into what it was like,, and you talked about not stopping you a lot. I would have gone into details about your addiction and how it feels and all the sensory details about cutting and save just the last two lines to say the person cant help and are wasting their time. It is often a good idea to save the last stanza or two lines of a poem to bring out the meaning and not the whole poem. |
