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My Poems
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Just One Lonely Heart. |
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Despair At Its Best. |
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To let it happen. |
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Let Their Sanity Waver. |
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Lets play like little kids |
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Diana |
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NightTime(October 1st,2009) |
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Epidemic Murder. |
Lets play like little kids
Two Small SOldier,
Clad All in silver.
Holding two long swords,
Their small hands wrapped around the bottom.
Charging toward the other side,
In a game of capture the flag.
Lets play hide and seek,
Behind the big oak trees.
Their leaves will be soaked with innocence,
For all of eternity.
Lets race out into the barren ground,
and see who can run the fastest.
I can scream louder than you can,
especially when the sword protudes from my back.
I will not fall to the ground I shall keep walking,
Stubling for the winning prize of,
Your childlike head.
The illuminting sword yet still clutched in my hand,
I swipe at your neck and miss by inches.
Your high-pitched laugh echoes in my head and I scream,
falling to the ground.
Our game of tag is now over,
You have captured the flag,
Now run.
Before your the one to fall,
as your blood soaks and mixes with mine.
Run little child,
Before your innocence is taken from you,
Lets play hide and seek once more,
You shall win the war.
| On August 7th 2009 Blueeyedgirl92 Said: |
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| This is by far,amazing. I loved every bit of detail. kmp. |
| On August 7th 2009 servantofall36 Said: |
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| Very good. Form is appropriate to the type of poem. Good word pictures. |
| On August 7th 2009 MauiWowies Said: |
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| loved it, great imagery |
| On August 7th 2009 ThruOnesEyes Said: |
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| What about Avant-Verse? |
| On August 7th 2009 NitneyRenee Said: |
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| Pretty good. I love free verse, especially when the writer still manages to make it poetic. Some of the lines sound a little forced, but... overall, nice job. |
| On August 7th 2009 kitkat298 Said: |
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| hehe...cute |


