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Created: 08/13 2009
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Category: Pain

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Diana

Sometimes you can see,
What I hide,
But you will never know what I so carefully hold inside.

A lyrical song,
Held together,
By the strings of life.

If you listen closely,
You may even hear the song,
of a broken heart.
Crying softly,
A mouring one,
But not the last; not it the first.

Oh to be logical,
Is quite impossible because,
I my dear person,
And too far-gone.

A small smile,
Will only hurt more,
And shatter me,
Oh so slowly.

But isn't that what I want?
To maybe die,
A slow planned death?

And so I smile and break out,
A beloved laugh.
Yet I'm too far-gone.

"Straighten up Diana."
Of course,
What do I have left?
To make exactly as you wish.

A loved one will confide,
In my stories but,
They will never believe them.

"Slim down a bit Diana."
Verywell, your wish is my command.
A couple days of waiting,
And it will happen,
I will make it happen.

Can't even glimps my sanity can you?
It doesn't exist,
Quit searching, I'm too far-gone.

"Be happy Diana."
WHY DO YOU ASK,
"Love me Diana"
OF ME,
"Give me your heart Diana."
THE ONLY THING,
"Be perfect Diana."
I CAN NEVER GIVE?

Let me put my guards back up,
They are mere peasants.

A knight in shining armor?
Hah!
Maybe for you,
But never for me.

Who wants a broken overused toy?
Exactly,
No one.

Throwing the key away,
Is way too dangerouse.
Someone might find it,
And try to unlock my hidden door.

I will swallow it,
So only I have access,
To my chamber of,
Torture.

Sitting on the edge of,
The earth,
On the bridge inbetween;
Diana and Diana.

They fight a mighty war,
For peace,
Or destruction.

But can't you see?
Diana,
She's already too far-gone.

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On October 22nd 2009 ShyChey07 Said: 
ShyChey07 really good!
On August 19th 2009 Blueeyedgirl92 Said: 
Blueeyedgirl92 I really like this poem. I see great potential in this piece of writing. I can feel the emotion you're giving off to the reader; it truly was amazing, in my point of view. Keep up the writing, and perhaps you will go far=)
On August 14th 2009 Fairiesrule112 Said: 
Fairiesrule112 its great! ^_^ i liked it, but you DID happen to get some things messed up, unless you intended it that way :) but it was great.
On August 13th 2009 DayumItsMikey Said: 
DayumItsMikey Not too bad. Needs a little tweaking
On August 13th 2009 GoreFanatic Said: 
GoreFanatic OO: That was amazing! I really liked it.
On August 13th 2009 XEMOtionalGrLX Said: 
XEMOtionalGrLX omg it's so sad, but i love it :[ great poem diana XD
On August 13th 2009 CollinRebuke Said: 
CollinRebuke Needs some serious editing and restructuring kiddo. One piece of advice I'll give you is this: in order to be a great writer you have to walk a fine line between never allowing yourself to be content with your own success, while maintaining the discipline to not butcher your own work. I suggest you spend some allowance and get a membership to a site like Fanstory.com to post your poetry and get peer reviewed critiques that will vastly improve the quality of your work. Either way, ten years from now I see real promise in you kid. Keep on keepin' on.
On August 13th 2009 kitkat298 Said: 
kitkat298 goood...Especially liked the paragraph max5892 quoted.
On August 13th 2009 roseling Said: 
roseling awesome!
On August 13th 2009 MauiWowies Said: 
MauiWowies Excellent work, I epsecially liked the internal monologe and the external diaologue, its adds to the suspence. Great word usage and although I would like to see more imagrey it was excelent. I did notice a few things that I think you could improve on but Im picky lol "But not the last; not it the first." Not it the first reads poorly and interupts the flow because it just doesnt sound right so you might want to think about changing that "I my dear person," It would sound better with a comma between I and my, also the and in the next line sounds like it could be "am" instead And lastly "Verywell" is two words. Well it was an excelent poem and I rather enjoyed it but you said you wanted constructie criticsm so I hope you dont mind my honesty. Two thumbs up my dear poet
On August 13th 2009 coldbitch93 Said: 
coldbitch93 very good!!!
On August 13th 2009 max5892 Said: 
max5892 I'd give this a million rates if i could =D
On August 13th 2009 max5892 Said: 
max5892 Oh wow...this is amazing! Great job!! Very emotional and i can definitely feel what you're trying to show...excellent work.

"'Be happy Diana.'
WHY DO YOU ASK,
'Love me Diana'
OF ME,
'Give me your heart Diana.'
THE ONLY THING,
"Be perfect Diana."
I CAN NEVER GIVE?

Sounds like a chorus to a song =D
On August 13th 2009 RadDianaxx298 Said: 
RadDianaxx298 Lol. I didnt mean to! D:
On August 13th 2009 ThruOnesEyes Said: 
ThruOnesEyes You depressed Lisa YOU TERRIBLE MONSTER HOW COULD YOU
On August 13th 2009 DashboardLogic Said: 
DashboardLogic This poem hold a lot of personal hardships. I have written quite a few like it myself. & I do believe that poems like this, that spill out ones soul, are the BEST! :)
On August 13th 2009 lisaljb Said: 
lisaljb Veryyyy interesting. Outstanding poem! You did wonderful! And now this poem depresses me -_-