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Erroneous Delusions
You won What else could he have possibly said? A well crafted snare An original design, encompassing him in Cautious his nature is Yet the potential reward far outweighed The risk of further damage from deceit Your warped mirrors and honey scented smoke provided for him an illusion he could not see past You must be a direct descendant of Geppetto With those marionette skills His strings you gingerly nudged too Gleefully unaware was he of you reeling him in Borderline paranoia or just incredibly cautious However you choose to define it Meticulous was he in his search for signs of cloaked deceit Scrutinizing every detail for signs that would forebode the likelihood of being trapped in that revolving door of his past He found none Much to your diabolic delight Deep in the still waters of despair was he His rescuer he believed you to be I mean what other purpose could there be To descend as low as he was is not a simple feat You had him. Surely you were aware of this Yet you sought only break him further Expertly you blinded him in your mist All he could see was you. There would be no other You revived him Renewed him Renewed interest Renewed vigor Renewed life lust Renewed for naught Macabre would best describe your actions Lady Puppeteer At his best you had him It was at his best you destroyed him Basking in your dishonest light he noticed not your severing the strings He collapsed. Strings fell both on and beside him He cannot move, he cannot scream All he can do is lie there clueless as to what just transpired He knew he was your puppet and simply hoped you simply slipped shall soon pick up the strings He hoped for naught Unaware he was of your pre-planned solitary exodus Unaware was he of your ability to save him Only do decimate what was already fragile Your performance was exemplary You won What more could he possibly say What more is there to say Facts are hitting him like a thunderous clap You should know this You hurt him and he is forever changed and not for the better Too good of a man is he to think ill of how you treated him I do not have such a handicap You believe you won Your victory was actually pyrrhic one For it came at the cost of both of your futures And in time you will look to have the damage you caused sutured. It will not heal and that is your loss. No amount of puppet work can help you then. Tragic. Douglas S. Williams
Please Login to post comments| On May 24th 2009 Amdusias Said: |
| Do you know what made Picasso's paintings so great?
He kept going on,without stopping,when he should have for some,he continued.
You function the same way. |
| On May 8th 2009 angeesseule Said: |
| This was a whirl wind of a poem, well formatted, the emotions are heart wretching yet beautifully sad, I love the whole idea, you bring old fashion and mordern together, it interweaves harmoniously.
Excellent job. |
| On March 16th 2009 chaotickitty12 Said: |
| this was fantastic, doug. i really fucking loved it! lol |
| On March 9th 2009 Octobear Said: |
| You let your feelings out with your words, and that is the true talent. I'm proud of you. And for whoever this poem is dedicated to,.. I will cut you. |
| On March 7th 2009 Kdanae88 Said: |
| wow this is deep! |
| On March 7th 2009 ArtemisStar Said: |
| It will be ok hunny. x |
| On March 6th 2009 lisaljb Said: |
| Its good to see a poem again but unfortunately I hate to see this. Great to read but I hate the site of it, the words all of it, I wanted a happy poem and instead this is what it is. Unfortunately... |
| On March 6th 2009 DarkSide1477 Said: |
| very deep, interesting choice of style and application of metaphor, I can't say the most original metaphor, puppets are commonly referenced but they are nevertheless always good to see and you used your words with uncommon style and grace, all and all I would say a great poem and most importantly one that can reach out to many people |
| On March 6th 2009 okinawangirl44 Said: |
| Wow, very nice, Doug! I'm glad to see another poem out. |
| On March 6th 2009 erickagere Said: |
| Wow, really well written. I'm sure a lot of people can relate to it. Good job Dougie Dlo. |
| On March 5th 2009 deadpoet Said: |
| oh my, i havent seen you post a poem in forever. this was very great snuggie wuggie teddy bear dougie |
| On March 5th 2009 BaileeClare Said: |
| This is amazing. One of the best that I've read on here.. and trust me, I've read many. You have quite a talent. |
| On March 5th 2009 transgenic Said: |
| Powerful. I love the whole concept of this. |
| On March 5th 2009 Lorianne13 Said: |
| this was amazing, you have real skill, and form that stands out brilliantly from the typical testriffic poetry. I look forward to reading more of your work:) |
| On March 5th 2009 gonzo4201 Said: |
| another masterful work, Doug... can definitely relate, so many times had I been the puppet on the string... Loved this... |
| On March 5th 2009 angellinya Said: |
| hmm...wow. it's sort of...edgar allen poe-ish, i'd say, judging by the vocabulary. really awesome poem |
| On March 5th 2009 bloodwraith1 Said: |
| hm...interesting. i like it |
| On March 5th 2009 NitneyRenee Said: |
| VERY good poem... your style is kind of unique, and you have a way of tip-toe-ing around an idea and yet saying exactly what you mean at the same time. I love it! |
| On March 5th 2009 Thugnastay227 Said: |
| *correction. Where I said "He knew he was your puppet and simply hoped you simply slipped shall soon pick up the strings" it should have said "He knew he was your puppet and simply hoped you would soon pick up the strings" sorry to all who read this. |
| On March 5th 2009 stitchchick92 Said: |
| Awh...Dougy :/ |
| On March 5th 2009 godsbluejay Said: |
| awwww........ :( i like how u brought in the puppet strings and all tho |
| On March 5th 2009 Thugnastay227 Said: |
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| Note.. A work of fiction. but inspired from events that most people can relate to on some level. |
