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Cry
You'll never let the ones around you dare to hear you cry
Breathe the breath of life while you stare unto the sky
Crunching in your stomach, knots, and twists will make you fry
It'll take down nice and quick, with a kiss, the wish to die
Raindrops pouring fiercely releasing pain that's felt within
*Trickle* *Trickle* Down it goes and lines up on your skin
The markings left behind allow the judges to see your sin
They see it there, and it's there to know, your pain multiplies by ten
Tragedy, curse the rain, it's showing off your fears
They don't know, they don't care, what's behind those crystal tears
Passing judgement slashing by, cutting at your ears
Leaves you down and out...to Nevermore, it appears
You'll never let the ones around you dare to hear you cry
Breathe the breath of life while you stare unto the sky
Crunching in your stomach, knots, and twists will make you fry
It'll take you down nice and quick, with a kiss, the wish to die
Please Login to post comments| On November 13th 2009 leahspugs Said: |
| okay..so this is my favorite!! i like this one alot. |
| On October 21st 2009 IMINLOVE890 Said: |
| this is pretty good |
| On July 15th 2009 Axeldude04 Said: |
| I read it. Hmmmmm.... |
| On July 12th 2009 Chrisy1994 Said: |
| ...I LOVE IT!!! |
| On July 9th 2009 Vexion15 Said: |
| Everybody takes everything so literal...somethings are metaphorical |
| On July 9th 2009 skr3m0status Said: |
| I agree with Stitch. But, I do see the potential in it. When I started writing, I used to think that there HAD to be rhyme, so I plugged in random words. But then, I got good at rhyming, and used words that made sense. Now, i don't even think about rhyming, it just happens randomly :b. |
| On July 8th 2009 stitchchick92 Said: |
| How do "crunching in your stomach, knotts, and twist" make you fry? Seems like you were so desperate to rhyme you just added random words to the end. |
| On July 7th 2009 maysha01 Said: |
| i did enjoy ur write...very nice |
| On July 7th 2009 twilightnutter Said: |
| love it brilliant poem |
| On July 7th 2009 cliffumper Said: |
| i love it! |
| On July 7th 2009 Princesslacy14 Said: |
| i love it. exactly how i feel. |
| On July 7th 2009 madmarcus Said: |
| not bad. |
| On July 7th 2009 MauiWowies Said: |
| Love the imagry in this one, it made me breathless, and had a great rhythm to it. I cant think of anything bad to say about it, great job. |
| On July 7th 2009 SM23gurl Said: |
| Great so very true!! |
| On July 7th 2009 MammothJoey Said: |
| Woah. Dude this is amazing. you should enter this somewhere.. No joke man. I do love it. So much emotion :) |
| On July 7th 2009 MammothJoey Said: |
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| Woah. Dude this is amazing. you should enter this somewhere.. No joke man. I do love it. So much emotion :) |
| On July 7th 2009 MammothJoey Said: |
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| Woah. Dude this is amazing. you should enter this somewhere.. No joke man. I do love it. So much emotion :) |
