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Created:
02/25 2008
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257
Category:
Tragedy
My Poems
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Leaving Yourself |
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For Yourself |
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Darkness Somewhere |
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Drunk Driver |
Drunk Driver
He looks at me
and I stare back
into his eyes,
they're coals of black
his eyes were once
so full of light
before that sad
and fateful night
they shown with vigor
they could brighten you day
till one drunk driver
took that away
he saw the whole thing
helpless as could be
he stood their scared
by the old apple tree
the driver got drunk
at his party that night
the left feely merry
said they were all right
so him, having fun
let the drive leave
i know now he wishes
that he just hadnt believed
he feels its his fault
and i fell bad for him true,
but my poem is my warning
don;t let it happen to you
| On July 11th 2008 momsrule Said: |
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| i like how it makes you see the senario in your mind and it also sends a great message (: i love it! |
| On March 5th 2008 AlBobby Said: |
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| ...
goodness, whoa. |
| On February 28th 2008 HumanF17TH Said: |
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| this is really good! |
| On February 27th 2008 betyoucantgess Said: |
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| aww
im sad now
thats awesome!!
your poem not my sadness
if this is true, sorry for your loss |
| On February 27th 2008 funchelsea Said: |
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| this is a very nice poem and i really like it, its really sad, and true in a lot of cases. |
| On February 27th 2008 dorkwitfork Said: |
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| ooh i really like this one... dya mind if i use it in my acting class? |
| On February 26th 2008 beautyisthewol Said: |
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| it's very good, you just need to fix the grammer errors. |
| On February 26th 2008 twilight8218 Said: |
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| i like it |
| On February 26th 2008 brokenwings122 Said: |
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| Well, the base for your poem is good, but you had a few spelling/grammar mistakes that took away from the flow. Fix that and it'll be great. |
| On February 26th 2008 mydragonlord Said: |
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| so true! very well captured! |
| On February 26th 2008 LadyCha0s Said: |
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| aww |
| On February 25th 2008 EvilRaven9892 Said: |
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| oh wow I saw everything happen |
| On February 25th 2008 tyiqoqibfiobao Said: |
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| very good |
| On February 25th 2008 xPunkxVanityx Said: |
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| 0.o This is really good! |


