Solid Ground

On September 3rd 2008 mypoeticrage Said:

	"you used to keep me strong, but now that you are gone, it's hard to carry on, so i wait here now, on solid ground" an idea to extend that one stanza? you may have already finished this lol i dont know its from back in april, im just skippin around your stuff at the moment

On June 6th 2008 audica Said:

	but when you left, i was weak. i couldn't even speak. idk, hat sux. but i like what u do have

On May 16th 2008 TyffaniKnott Said:

	NICELY DONE... WELL THOUGHT OUT!

On April 24th 2008 sixtiesdoll Said:

	I on't know any suggestions~ I like it alot though. Nicely done. :)

On April 23rd 2008 edwardlover92 Said:

	I think you should leave it the way it is if you can't get the ending, I do that sometimes

On April 17th 2008 jenni24014 Said:

	When I scream, please understand I wish not to hold your hand when you changed, you changed my plans With you is where I don't belong... just givin' it a shot.. good luck!

On April 16th 2008 LonelyBunni3 Said:

	sorry, another mistake. Dumb computer! ADD*..."if you add more"

On April 16th 2008 LonelyBunni3 Said:

	you more*

On April 16th 2008 LonelyBunni3 Said:

	I think the line "You used to keep me strong" should be the last if you more to this poem.

On April 16th 2008 poopstix Said:

	i think if you added one more line to finish it off it would be cool, no idea what that line could be but im sure you could figure it out =)

On April 15th 2008 dropdeadsucka Said:

	Yes, the beginning is really good. It's alright if you don't finish a poem sometimes. Sometimes you just need to think them through, and others, well they just come from the heart.

On April 15th 2008 dsouthernlily Said:

	loving the begining

On April 14th 2008 mydragonlord Said:

	this is a difficult one it is good as it is, however you could extend it a bit but i really cant advise which to chose, an idea could be to tell more of the secret persone.

On April 13th 2008 CharTheKnight Said:

	Truthfully, if you really wanted to you could keep it the way it is. Just because it is short doesn't make it any less meaningful... that may seem lazy but it's your piece of art...your child so treat it as such. :D. LOVE IT!

On April 13th 2008 sweetkelli16 Said:

	i like it the way it is... i usually don't like poems that rhyme but this one is really good

On April 13th 2008 surefirefailur Said:

	I know it's nitpicky, but "It's like when your were around." should be "It's like when you're around" or "When you were around" Well, I have no idea where to go with it.

On April 13th 2008 tiffany1058 Said:

	now that your gone things turn out all wrong you used to hide me from despair now your not even there 0.o i try