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06/21 2008
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Diary Of A Cheater.
I'm so ashamed
I've lost all inner power,
hating myself more
with each passing hour.
Knowing all I had to do
was say no,
feeling disgusting,
and easy, and low.
When I had you
I went off with him,
making wrong choices
at the slightest whim.
I knew it was wrong
I knew I should stop,
but that didn't stop me
from crawling on top.
Yes I am unfaithful
no self-control,
I really have to get some
it's clouding up my soul.
Please Login to post comments| On August 22nd 2008 mypoeticrage Said: |
| real talk 'Thumb Up." |
| On June 25th 2008 Andy2Anomaly Said: |
| You really are a genius poet. |
| On June 23rd 2008 Mogeygriffin Said: |
| yes self control is hard to obtain |
| On June 23rd 2008 ChristieSaya Said: |
| unique style of yours.. |
| On June 22nd 2008 muse4apoem Said: |
| Forget my insane comment from before. It rymes all the way threw! lol |
| On June 21st 2008 twilight023 Said: |
| I think this is very good. I like it alot. |
| On June 21st 2008 LonelyBunni3 Said: |
| "Knowing all I had to do
was say no,
feeling disgusting,
and easy, and low." Why don't u try adding a period after no. Then again, depends what you mean. The way i interpret it was this way: Knowing all i had to do is say no, feeling disgusted and uneasy *I believe u mean Uneasy not easy, not sure?). I suggested the period because it stops a thought/idea. It's difficult to explain what I mean, but I hope you know what i mean. He-he.
The last stanza was funny. I like you poem is just the second stanza that throws me off.
KEEP WRITTING!
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| On June 21st 2008 muse4apoem Said: |
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| The second paragraph dosen't ryme. It was a fantastic poem though! ~Kudos~ |
| On June 21st 2008 ALIESAM21 Said: |
| everyone loses their self control sometimes, it is human nature! does not make you easy! |
| On June 21st 2008 xHickChick789x Said: |
| omg I can really relate to this one... I know this feeling pretty well. *thumbs up* Nice job! |
| On June 21st 2008 deadpoet Said: |
| its funny that this was the first poem i read of yours...but i should check others out im sure they arent all like this (not that it was bad, not bad at all) ;) |
| On June 21st 2008 JakeBozz Said: |
| SO cLEanse yerself sheeeeeesh |
| On June 21st 2008 hpfan731 Said: |
| wow...very to the point! i like it :) |
