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people said i needed to rhyme more...Rate this Poem
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Created:
04/19 2007
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1171
Category:
Love
My Poems
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The Broken Friendship |
open your eyes
You are the only one for me…
But I’m waiting for you to see….
That this isn’t how it’s supposed to be….
Your letting what others think take you away from me….
Who cares what others think?
Maybe their jealous, maybe they don’t know us….
As long as our love for each other is strong nobody can tell us we’re wrong…
Please Login to post comments| On April 20th 2007 pnipearl Said: |
| another nice one.... |
| On April 20th 2007 pnipearl Said: |
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| another nice one.... |
| On April 20th 2007 pnipearl Said: |
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| another nice one.... |
| On April 20th 2007 ashleyswebb Said: |
| very nice♥♥ |
| On April 19th 2007 Trippaholic Said: |
| well done..i like it!! |
| On April 19th 2007 Scrtlyinluv93 Said: |
| i love it |
| On April 19th 2007 bjlpr Said: |
| That's a good poem. |
| On April 19th 2007 me8ga8n Said: |
| wow i loved it. it rocked my world!! lol love it |
| On April 19th 2007 rainytuesday Said: |
| some of the best poetry doesn't rhyme. thats nonsense, keep writing however it comes out put it down. |
| On April 19th 2007 alrey10 Said: |
| man you are just so gooooooodddddddd!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
| On April 19th 2007 dureall Said: |
| It's all bout how you feel bro, never mind the rhyme, you do fine. |
| On April 19th 2007 jmh1011 Said: |
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| this is very good i can relate
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| On April 19th 2007 Foreverlyn Said: |
| A well written piece of material, dont' worry about structure, essential you are expressing yourself, judgement is in part self critism. There is a spelling error in "their jealous" should be They're.
Good work |
| On April 19th 2007 damesecho Said: |
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| poems don't have to be about rhyme and structure persay. |
| On April 19th 2007 emislovely Said: |
| nice poem, but poems are also about structure. maybe next time try using similiar syllables to create a pattern and to make the words flow more easily |
| On April 19th 2007 jmgtrplyr84 Said: |
| not bad bro... When I saw the titles it reminded me of the Christian song "Open the Eyes of My Heart" I like it though. |
| On April 19th 2007 drowningnlove Said: |
| thats a great poem. I really like it. |
| On April 19th 2007 xxcassiejayxx Said: |
| that's a good poem, you're getting a lot better if you compare this to your first one :) |
| On April 19th 2007 wannabetimthe1 Said: |
| nice |
