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Created:
05/19 2008
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236
Category:
Passion
My Poems
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26
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To the Beginning |
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17
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Becoming a one |
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15
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Wherever you go |
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17
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Who is that man |
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20
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Who will I become? |
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23
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Don't let go |
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26
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Looking back |
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21
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Killer at heart |
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19
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Tucked away |
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17
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Unfortunate addiction |
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15
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Reality Show |
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17
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Secrets of Beneath |
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29
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Sour sweet taste |
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16
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Keyless |
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Free Hugs |
Feel the wind
Feel the wind
Softly blow
Softly touch
Your tenderness
Your fragile mind
Your heart of gold
Feel the wind
Caress you blindly
Jostling your disguise
Discovering what lies behind
What lies behind
The unknown
Feel the wind
Change in velocity
As it closes in
And hurls care into your burden
That was hidden
So well
So long ago
Feel the wind
And let it relive
Once again
Feel the wind
Please Login to post comments| On June 1st 2008 offutt123 Said: |
| I like your poetry, its entertaining. I want to feel the wind like this lol |
| On May 26th 2008 orangefizzpop Said: |
| i love. this. |
| On May 21st 2008 JakeBozz Said: |
| And what emotions does it bring to have past memories floating across your face? Oh vague poem indeed. It doesn't seem so much a "happy" poem as it is a "reflection" poem - staring out at the wind blowing the past moments into your face, I've felt that feeling; wondering what does any of it mean? Breathing in the past experiences again in this life, this...Mysterious..Contemplating life we are subject to..What are we. We are humans and we've contaminated the winds against our smiling faces for greed. Good one. My only critique is it's too vague, it's vague and it's not - inside every line I can see ten more lines describing what the emotions feel, and you cut it off and move to the next line for some reason. Good one though. |
| On May 20th 2008 Thugnastay227 Said: |
| impressive work as usual darling. |
| On May 20th 2008 kissofasia Said: |
| happy poem,i like it. |
| On May 20th 2008 Yanks19 Said: |
| awesomeness! wind rocks! |
| On May 20th 2008 morbidangel585 Said: |
| oooo i felt the wint. haha i loved it. |
