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Created:
04/14 2007
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261
Category:
Love
My Poems
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28
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Accepted |
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15
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Fallen |
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13
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Key |
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17
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Breaking |
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13
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In a Moment |
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14
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Alone in the Dark |
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23
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Suicide |
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10
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Final Release |
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27
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Addiction |
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13
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Waivering Faith |
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Too Good for You |
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11
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Silent Confessions |
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I love you |
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Gone |
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Mistaken |
I love you
I love you.
Those words.
So hard to say.
I hold them tightly back,
Behind my tongue.
Too precious to release,
To just anyone.
I love you.
I’m holding them,
Keeping safe.
Waiting.
For the right time.
Then you come.
And you say those words.
You whisper them softly.
Gracing my ears.
I love you.
Too soon, I say.
I’m afraid, I think.
That’s ok.
You’ll wait, no pressure.
I ponder, how do I feel?
Do I give it up?
Speak those words?
Agony.
I love you
I know I feel it,
It’s in me,
Just waiting.
To be spoken.
I look at you,
And you smile.
I open my mouth.
A gaping fear.
On the edge of a cliff.
I say the words.
Almost stumbling as I do.
Knowing you have my heart.
Now and always.
I love you.
*Author's note: I know it's not the greatest, but it was in me so I had to write it. Tell me what you think, whether good or bad. :)
Please Login to post comments| On September 29th 2007 perdylilpyro Said: |
| Although a good phrase, I think this might be the culprit of a disruption in the flow of your poem:
"Do I give it up?
Speak those words?
Agony. " Omitting this phrase would add potency to "I open my mouth, A gaping fear" and possibly communicate your original meaning more strongly. Oh, and did I mention? This is a fantastic work of art |
| On June 15th 2007 fgggfx Said: |
| great poem! |
| On April 15th 2007 xxcassiejayxx Said: |
| i like it, you're great at describing feelings |
| On April 15th 2007 ofloveandblood Said: |
| It was a very good poem, and not hurt all by the fact that it was spontaneous (I'm guessing that's what you mean when you say "it was just in me"). It's more raw and true when it just "comes" to you, good job! Oh, and check out my new story, it just "came" to me as well. |
| On April 14th 2007 chickenbroth Said: |
| I think the most beautiful part of it was that it was inside of you. |
| On April 14th 2007 frodoismyname Said: |
| i love it!! comment on mine it's called " you told me.." thanks!!! it's great !
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| On April 14th 2007 anikalovessun Said: |
| i really like this. i can relate totally. you describe all of the feelings so...accurately. i like it. x] |
