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the knife of painRate this Poem
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Created:
07/13 2007
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1089
Category:
Haiku
My Poems
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Silence |
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Dad's Accident |
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Christian |
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Love Is... |
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Walking Alone |
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Worthless |
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My Best Friend |
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Pulling The Trigger |
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Don't Give Up |
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82
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Falling Apart |
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Dancing In The Rain |
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Just For You |
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Going To Hell - Cheater |
Deep Red Blood
Blood drips from the knife
The crimson red holds deep pain inside
No one knows your fear
Author's Note: My first few tries at Haiku's, there will be more up tomorrow. Please check out my other two tonight. Thanks. Give advice!
Please Login to post comments| On June 21st 2008 onelove6fs Said: |
| PRETTY! READ MINE? |
| On May 19th 2008 5cheychey5 Said: |
| nice haiku. its hard to make such short poems meaningful. but u did it. good job. |
| On February 8th 2008 locachoclate Said: |
| this is a really good poem, although its quite short, it doesnt matter, although its more like a quote |
| On January 12th 2008 TheDragonwitch Said: |
| Very nice for the first few, i have also just started to write this style |
| On January 8th 2008 ama7693 Said: |
| this is genious! |
| On December 1st 2007 dhmm Said: |
| wow good job |
| On July 28th 2007 LadyEJ Said: |
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| As previously said, remove 'inside' and you have a wonderful haiku. Its amazing how so few words can express imagery and mood so well. Keep on writing x |
| On July 22nd 2007 MelissaDA Said: |
| i really like it. nice job. |
| On July 15th 2007 Byrnesrebel Said: |
| i like this one, very much. ^.^ |
| On July 15th 2007 fgggfx Said: |
| i luv it |
| On July 14th 2007 Carcer Said: |
| very good for your first few =D |
| On July 14th 2007 guffa78 Said: |
| good work....now i know what a haiku is....i forgot!!! |
| On July 14th 2007 mrskritter Said: |
| great |
| On July 13th 2007 Javellef Said: |
| I love the message expressed. Like two others have said make sure it is 5-7-7 in syllables instead of words. You are doing a great job. |
| On July 13th 2007 ivy81 Said: |
| ya take out the word inside and its got the right 5-7-5 nice try tho ^^ |
| On July 13th 2007 angelofwar4 Said: |
| If you take oout the word 'inside', then you'll have a Haiku - 5-7-5 syllibles. Besides, the phrase "The crimson red holds deep pain" has all the meaning in it, putting 'inside' at the end Is not needed. Very GOOD!!! |
| On July 13th 2007 angelofwar4 Said: |
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| WOW! That is good! |
| On July 13th 2007 Jeremy062902 Said: |
| I just started trying this style myself. Hard to write something meaningful with so few syllables. But you did good work on this piece. |
| On July 13th 2007 Jeremy062902 Said: |
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| Interesting haiku about cutting. |
| On July 13th 2007 JWalker2406 Said: |
| I really like it :) |
| On July 13th 2007 inlovewithc17 Said: |
| i like this one better than the other cause even though its a haiku this one still has meaning and emotion i really like it!!!!!!!! |
