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09/19 2007
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Pain
My Poems
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untitled |
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Forgotten life |
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a thought |
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Grey |
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Eternity |
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untitled |
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the poet |
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I miss you |
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Lie to me |
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Broken muse |
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Deanied |
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Looking in your eyes |
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Deanied
Flashbacks happen.
Of death, of life,
Of lies, of truth,
Of ease, of strife.
Where I was, What I never saw.
I take the pen,
And with cold fervor,
I darken my skin.
Of death, of life,
Of lies, of truth,
Of ease, of strife.
Where I was, What I never saw.
I take the pen,
And with cold fervor,
I darken my skin.
Hate is happy,
Screwed to the core,
As I deny God,
I pray for more.
As life dissipates
Before my eyes,
I sink down low
And begin to cry.
I see past sight,
And hear the devil speak.
Sensations fry,
Sanity leaks.
Teeth sink in
as vengence reigns.
Hate-red torn,
Raped and stained.
Till death do they part,
As I watch and stare
As they love,
Do I care?
Sensations gone,
Sanity drained.
The furvor inside me
Hides for awhile
then attacks with canes.
As life dissipates
Before my eyes,
I sink down low
And begin to cry.
Please Login to post comments| On September 24th 2007 brickintheface Said: |
| Some of the sections of the poem have more than four lines, but most only have four. I find this to be quite boring. Try random poem forms..like:
The poem above this comment is boring
It drains the soul
I regret reading it.
You are not loved,
Please know that
Everyone talks about you negatively
So, ya, they really do.
Also, you took a lot of time making accounts to respond to your poem so you could feel good about yourself, that's cool.
kthxbai. |
| On September 24th 2007 laundrybaskets Said: |
| The word you would have used, had you any language skill, is "denied". "Deanied" either is just some word you made up, or your BFF 'Dean' denied you, so you made some swell name up for the feeling. Bravo, golf claps, and jaundice. |
| On September 19th 2007 laundrybaskets Said: |
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| wow, taking some writing classes ok? and get over yourself. also, a theme or thematic element would be nice. something besides being lonely cuz you're ugly. or whatevs. but still, these wanks who made other comments are also problem-ful. thought i'd make up a word to make you feel a bit better there. ok then, cheer up or get out. |
| On September 19th 2007 cutekitti123 Said: |
| coolip |
| On September 19th 2007 transgenic Said: |
| Wow...Deep and emotional...Amazing! |
| On September 19th 2007 AllPru Said: |
| wow! very deep. |
| On September 19th 2007 cassnorton Said: |
| Wow. Love ur words |
| On September 19th 2007 browneyes33 Said: |
| Awesome |
| On September 19th 2007 alexia66 Said: |
| love it its deep and powerful |
