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Changelings Chapt. 1 Pt. 1

I've been writing this story for 5 years... I have 130 pages so far... I'm looking for perfection... Time to toss it aside and finish this book... I have it all hand written... So now, I'm translating it to electronic storage... I think it would make an awesome screenplay as well. Let me know what y'all think... Subscribe if you like it.
Creative Created on 11-24-08 Views(998) Story Rating PG

He was so terribly hungry…

He reared up, viewing his surroundings with a glaring eye surveying the horizon, checking for anything unusual. He saw no shapes against the waving prairie grass, but flicked his tongue out anyway in cautious annoyance, as he had felt a dull vibration along the path not long before…

He crouched low again, laying the length of his body to the ground and lay stock still for a moment, thinking in his own primitive way, attempting to ignore the pain in his gut.

His kind did not, and still do not feel self-pity, but today this creature in particular, felt a wash of despair. He had emerged from his egg late, long after his siblings, almost into the crux of winter. But for the foolishness of a mouse and his mate, he would have died, but to his undying gratitude, there was a full nest of young mice to eat at his leisure, right in his birthing place. He had even managed to hide for a while, returning back into the egg when the mice returned home from whatever it was they were doing, and so even kept warm through part of the winter.

Inevitably he had been discovered, and at this time he killed the male, and the female ran, never to return… Satisfied after eating all the juveniles, and not being large enough yet to eat the male, he drifted off to hibernation, as he was supposed to be…

But here he was awake! Early! And the ground still covered in a bitter frost in the mornings. There was nothing to eat, and he was growing more and more tired by the moment as he made his way across the plains.

‘Losing calories, need food soon…’ came a weak noise from nowhere in particular.

The young reptile stopped hurriedly, tongue flickering furiously. ‘Danger, danger!’ His senses screamed, but from where?

He lay there a full 50 heartbeats, hearing, seeing, and tasting nothing.

His dread passed from him in small increments, heartbeat to heartbeat, his fear subsided.

He continued more cautiously this time, this time allowing himself to feel the pangs in his gut. They reminded him he was alive, and why he was out here searching.

THUD, THUD.

Again, he slowed… Tasting the air he caught a scent… It was not very strong… though still nearby, he deduced it to be a creature not much larger than himself.

And female.  Interesting. He hadn’t come across very many female creatures yet. They didn’t much interest him, he had no drive to find a mate…  He had only shed his first skin this morning. The scent was not particularly malodorous, and rather pleased his senses in an unexpected way.

Aaaaahhhh there… Something in the distance bit into his olfactory senses sharply, again reminding him of his reason for being out. Food was not too far away, and it carried the pungent smell of many warm bodies living together. Finally, a meal.

He hurried on, forgetting about the presence in the grass behind him.

 

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On March 28th 2009 bowzlady1 Said: 
bowzlady1 this is different from anything else on here. I like the detail.
On March 21st 2009 KIRKME Said: 
KIRKME haha this is funny.
On January 18th 2009 bertyek Said: 
bertyek You probably put this on here a while ago, but I haven't been on here that long. I really enjoy the way you write. I have changelings in my story too, they aren't quite the same thing though...they are monsters more or less. Anyway, I look forward to reading the rest :)
On December 17th 2008 Lovelyeyes0 Said: 
Lovelyeyes0 no i didn't know that lol. i came up with the name and story line 5 years ago
On December 2nd 2008 Sezzie93 Said: 
Sezzie93 great so far hun but did u no that there is a film coming out soon called changelings? ^^ i'm sure when u've fininshed ur book it will be so much better :D it's cool so far ^^
On November 30th 2008 Radio0893 Said: 
Radio0893 wow... OMG WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!?!? nice dude :D
On November 28th 2008 dtsheep Said: 
dtsheep Here. i read this already, cat. ha. What's up? Good when i read it before, still good now.
On November 28th 2008 Lovelyeyes0 Said: 
Lovelyeyes0 Selection for new cover art.
On November 27th 2008 kassie94 Said: 
kassie94 im commentin nd readin next one
On November 27th 2008 Yuuki48 Said: 
Yuuki48 This is amazing. :D
On November 27th 2008 Lovelyeyes0 Said: 
Lovelyeyes0 ^_^
On November 27th 2008 4evacurst Said: 
4evacurst Preston this is amazing!!
On November 26th 2008 lisaljb Said: 
lisaljb 5 years, you've been writing this? So 14 years of age you started, this is great! :)
On November 26th 2008 flipitout Said: 
flipitout wow i like the way you use words.. what reptile is that? and i wanna read the part two already... love it!
On November 26th 2008 SAXBLONDE Said: 
SAXBLONDE nice preston! :)
On November 25th 2008 CassieZ Said: 
CassieZ o.O wow.. thats ugh.. different, very well written though.
On November 25th 2008 JWalker2406 Said: 
JWalker2406 Interesting story. I agree with the others about well it's written. It is true you have really though this out. Great job can't wait to read more.
On November 25th 2008 Realmuckoy Said: 
Realmuckoy dude! I actually thought I was reading from an actual published book! I can't wait to read more!
On November 25th 2008 DashboardLogic Said: 
DashboardLogic Wow. I never thought you were this good of a writer. I love the details and the depth of it all. Great job.
On November 25th 2008 servantofall36 Said: 
servantofall36 This is well done. Good, reader grabbing opening.
On November 25th 2008 Yanks19 Said: 
Yanks19 really well writtne preston! good story! cant wait to see what happens
On November 25th 2008 LaineyX Said: 
LaineyX I like it :D
On November 25th 2008 morbidangel585 Said: 
morbidangel585 you'll have to keep me posted!!
On November 25th 2008 alyxxxxxxx Said: 
alyxxxxxxx kmp[: you write really well.
On November 24th 2008 852295 Said: 
852295 I really liked it - obviously thought through, and from a different view point compared to others. kmp :)