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The Unwanted
Romance
 Created on 12-25-07
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The wind blew, the lightening shoot down not 10 ft. from the tree, the thunder cracked. Demetri sat there with the stake at his heart as the winds blew his shaggy black hair and the rain hit his face. He though about what he just did. He killed her. The only person he ever loved.
Kerry.
He knew he should have feed before he went and seen her, but he had to see her big blue eyes. The though of her mangled body made him sick.
Demetri thought about how much he hated being a vampire. He looked at his reflection in the river. He still had blood all over his face. He quickly tried to wipe it off but it was no good.
He raised the stake and was about to plunge it through his heart when he smelt the most horrible smell ever. He threw the stake down and turned around. Thats when he saw her.
Tell me if you think I should continue!
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Please Login to post comments| On January 4th 2008 xxxAngelicaxxx Said : | |
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def. keep it going. it seems like it will be really good. but you should read through it again. there are quite a few errors but overall so far so good. keep me posted |
| On January 1st 2008 BlackHeartedMe Said : | |
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love it!!!! Keep me posted please! |
| On December 30th 2007 krislynn08 Said : | |
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ooo this sounds really good im excited that you have the second chapter up so let the story begin lol nice work :) |
| On December 28th 2007 JWalker2406 Said : | |
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Glad to see you have a second chapter because I was gonna also suggest continueing :D Hope the second one is longer and with more detail! (I'm a sucker for details hehehe!!) Also just a few spelling mistakes but nothing huge :D On to the next one :D |
| On December 26th 2007 KimSmallwood Said : | |
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ooo thats cool! loven' it! keep me posted pah-leez! [but yess; longer!] |
| On December 26th 2007 twilightx28 Said : | |
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Ehh, I like it, but blondemoment22 is right. It's pretty pkay. Keep me posted?? |
| On December 26th 2007 kinkybitch101 Said : | |
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i like it...its good...keep me posted |
| On December 26th 2007 blondemoment22 Said : | |
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length is a slight issue.. |
| On December 26th 2007 blondemoment22 Said : | |
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goooood... |
| On December 26th 2007 ALICHELLA16 Said : | |
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i like it keep me posted |
| On December 26th 2007 necrosiss Said : | |
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Keep me posted. |
| On December 26th 2007 cashy31196 Said : | |
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wow... this reminds me of a book i read. i think u should continue. if u do keep me posted plz! |
