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Suddenly Part 2; Chapter 9

The Unwanted Princess

Drama Created on 10-11-08 Views(558) Story Rating G

Princess Arista DeCounte is the daughter of King Edward DeCounte.  She’s the youngest of his three children, and is the daughter whom the king never wanted.  She was an abomination to her father, since he wanted only one daughter and more sons and winded up having a second daughter.  She was only five years old when her older sister Tabitha told her “you were never wanted, and one day they’ll kill you at any given moment if you do anything wrong.”  Her brother Edmund on the other hand who was the oldest out of the three of them, and next in line to the thrown loved Arista very much, and always protected her from Tabitha.  When Arista was 7, Tabitha 9, and Edmund 10 their mother Mary died leaving the children alone with their father, a man they barely knew at all.  It hurt the king badly when the Queen died.  He didn’t know how to handle things anymore so he always left to war fighting, always trying to find a way to die and leave this earth, but it never happened he always came back victorious.  Three years had passed and the King fell in love with Isabelle a princess of Nottingham the oldest of the Nottingham King.  Arista adored Isabelle since Isabelle was only 17 when she married her father.  An extravagant wedding it was and they both were happy.  The only one who wasn’t happy was Tabitha; she tried everything to have Isabelle executed, or overthrowed.  Arista on the other hand loved her dearly, and they got along well and Isabelle thought of Arista as her own daughter.

 

        “Arista!” Tabitha yelled outside of her chamber door.

 

        “Yes,” Arista cried softly.

        “I need to talk to you,” Tabitha said behind the door.

 

        “Alright, come on in,” she said happily.

 

        “Look, I know you love Isabelle, but I can’t take it anymore.”

 

        “What do you mean, Isabelle’s sweet I like her.”

 

        “Arista your only 10 you don’t know what Isabelle’s like.  Can I tell you a secret?” Tabitha asked her.

 

        “Of course Tabitha, were sisters, you can tell me anything,” Arista told her smiling. 

 

        “Alright, I caught Isabelle kissing Lord Nikolas,” Tabitha said almost crying.  Tabitha had a huge crush on Nikolas even though he was 19 and Tabitha was 12 but she loved him dearly.

 

        “What are you saying Tabitha?”

 

“I’m saying that she stole Nikolas from me, how can she do that to me, I hate her.”

 

        “Well we can’t tell father it’ll break his heart,” Arista told her.

 

        “No, I don’t care if it breaks his little heart he’s going to know,” Tabitha told her and walked out of Arista’s room crying.  That night Arista heard Isabelle screaming for dear life when the kings guards dragged her off into the dungeons.  Arista cried to herself when she heard Isabelle, she so badly wanted to go and save her but how it was already too late.  Later that night she heard a soft tap at her door.

        “Come in,” she said quietly.  Just then Edmund appeared at her bedside, and hugged her gently and fell asleep with her in his arms.  In the morning Arista awoke to see Edmund asleep at the foot of her bed.

 

        “Edmund,  Edmund,” she gently whispered and nudged him gently on his arm.

 

        “Oh, what is it father, it’s too early.”

 

        “Edmund, it’s me Arista, you fell asleep in my room.”

 

        “What?” he said groggily.

 

        “You slept here all night,” she giggled.

 

        “Oh, I’m sorry Arista, I didn’t mean too, but I knew you’d be sad, since what happened to Isabelle.”

 

        “Why did they do that Edmund?” she asked confused.

 

        “I don’t know, and we’ll probably never know,” he said turning to walk out of her room.

 

        “Will you promise me something Edmund?” Arista asked him.

 

        “Sure, anything,” he replied.

 

        “Please don’t let father send me to the dungeons.”

 

        “Don’t worry Arista it will never happen, and I won’t let it happen,” he said and gave her a kiss on the cheek.

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Well this is one of my new stories, so just tell me what u think the rest is coming a long little by little so be patient.  I'm still going to be writing Suddenly but i've been so busy with college that i havent had time so this weekend i will put up another chapter of Suddenly and The Unwanted Princess.  So just rate and comment please:)

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On November 24th 2008 roseling Said :
roseling i like it
On November 13th 2008 gracalice Said :
gracalice its wonderful
On October 11th 2008 MissRubberDuck Said :
MissRubberDuck This is really good! Keep it up!
On October 11th 2008 liljqpj Said :
liljqpj I like it.
On October 11th 2008 xanitsirkx Said :
xanitsirkx Hey, I like this a lot :) Will you read my story and tell me how you like it?
On October 11th 2008 yellowrose8817 Said :
yellowrose8817 For everyone to know this is a love story not a historical story so everything is going to be made up alright, sorry about the grammer errors i just havnt had time to work on it but i'll fix it, shoot if ur a biology major there is only little time to write. For the background stuff nothings real, i just needed names and those were the names that popped into my head, but thanks for the advice anyway. SO to let everyone know its again a love story, and its fantasy which means is not real. But thanks for the comments i really appreciated all of them Thanks Again:)
On October 11th 2008 analyssarenae Said :
analyssarenae i like it! alot!
On October 11th 2008 MiSSBoSSAAYxDD Said :
MiSSBoSSAAYxDD not bad... i like it.. keep it up
On October 11th 2008 monkey892 Said :
monkey892 Okay this is cool! I like it!
On October 11th 2008 1toughcookie Said :
1toughcookie oh and haha kmp? i forgot to add that
On October 11th 2008 1toughcookie Said :
1toughcookie :) I thought it was great, I really enjoyed it. And I am a write on here also, like some of the others who have commented earlier before me. { I might not be as great as them} But I do know, that when you write a story, you can make it whatever you want. cause your the one who put the time and dedication into coming up with the creative idea and story plot. So CONGRATS! && yes, you might want to take some of their comments real cause really their just trying to help you, not be mean. :) keep that in mind.
On October 11th 2008 stitchchick92 Said :
stitchchick92 I agree with max. If you are going to create a fiction story make it completely fiction. For you down there arguing with him, it's constructive criticism. I wouldn't get mad at someone for that.
On October 11th 2008 max5892 Said :
max5892 uh excuse me roebrugh? you DO have to be correct! and how is it stealing if their historical facts? are you stupid? And i agree with JWalker..except for the fact that if it's fantasy, dont use names of real places (like nottingham) unless you want to confuse the shit out of your readers..
and naenae756...its VERY related to story writing...real or not, dont confuse your readers!
On October 11th 2008 JWalker2406 Said :
JWalker2406 It's an okay start....But I do have to say that I wasn't really "pulled" into the story. You need to find a way to put detail into your story, not just stating this or that...No offense. Just spruce it up a bit. I would say that Max is right if you are wanting to write a historical story...But it could also be fantasy with made up names, etc so I wouldn't worry too much about that :) but I would say to spell check and grammar check cause there were a few places that had mistakes,etc. Anyways...I'll keep reading so I can watch ya grow :D
On October 11th 2008 naenae765 Said :
naenae765 What max5892 said was unrelated to writting a story especially if it was made to not be real or back from the past. I like it and I hope you keep writting.
On October 11th 2008 rosebrugh Said :
rosebrugh you dont have to be correct and besides that there are already stories out that have the names, history and everything else perfect. that would be copying, so she made it into her own way. very creative.love the story
On October 11th 2008 max5892 Said :
max5892 you're in college? and you havnt studied grammar yet? or history? before writing ANYTHING in a historical setting, research it! there was no "king of nottingham" or whatever...and the names, obviously not old English names, except maybe Edmund... the plot is ok, but work on the background...its VERY important if you want ot be taken seriously...
On October 11th 2008 XxXastinXxX Said :
XxXastinXxX wow this is amazingg!!
On October 11th 2008 RaneDropss Said :
RaneDropss oh my god. i love this! i cant wait for more!!!!!!!!
On October 11th 2008 Sammybabe92 Said :
Sammybabe92 sounds awsome!defaintly keep em coming
On October 11th 2008 Nitlaya Said :
Nitlaya two words, i fucking love it, wait nvm, but i love it, more please
On October 11th 2008 sportshottie4e Said :
sportshottie4e like it
On October 11th 2008 RainexTeardrop Said :
RainexTeardrop sounds kool can't wait for more